FIRST WRITING
PHOTO D:
This photo
shows a group of people who are in a trip. It looks like they are a group of
friends. They could be a family but they are same ages. There are two men and
two women, maybe they could be two partners that went for a trip together. All of them have a camera and they are taking
photos to a couple of leopards which are looking at the tourist on a branch. The
jungle could be in Africa or in America. I think it’s more probably that they
are in Africa. It looks like the people are on an expedition in Africa. It’s an
emotional photo, I love nature and animals. When I get older, I would like to go
on an expedition, like the people in the image.
COMPARING PHOTO D AND C:
Both photos
show groups of people who are on holiday. In photo C are a lot of people in a
beach, some of them are having a bath, the rest are sitting on the sand or
walking. I suppose that the woman who is wearing a black T-shirt and pink
shorts is married with the man who is wearing a white T-shirt, the kids that
are near them, the boy in dark clothes and the baby in pink clothes are their
children.
On the
other hand, in the picture D, the place that the people choose for their
holiday is different.
Anyway I like
the two photos, but photo C looks more familiar than photo D.
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ResponderEliminarIt's quite well, just try to use more creative structures: conditionals, passive, etc. and a more varied language.
ResponderEliminarAs for the Comparison, try the first two paragraphs to be the same length. Explain the second paragraph in a more detailed way.
Be careful with:
"are a lot of people" = "there are a lot of people" (Comparing, l.1)
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